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We're exchanging goodbyes,
But we're still standing together.

And there's so much to say,
We still talk about the weather.

But the sky is really fascinating,
This silence incapacitating.

The windows down,
Wind drowns out our wishes.

I'd pray to a star,
But tonight they're non-existent

I'd pray to the moon,
But it's so damn inconsistent.

So I'll pray to the rain,
I trust things that fall.

I pray to the rain,
To break this brick wall.

I try to take away your pain,
But I'm no narcotic.

And I might be insane,
But I'm no damn psychotic.
Just some thoughts that happened to rhyme. Feel free to call it weak.
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StArMigEt Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love this one! Its amazing. Your work is fantastic :D
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ThermadorianGrey Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012
Ooh, thanks! Always great to make a new fan. Thanks for the Watch, keep reading, pretty please
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StArMigEt Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
haha of course! I really enjoy your writing. You are most welcome believe me the pleasure is mine :)
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sunshinegypsy Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012  Professional Writer
Haha! I never like rhyming poetry but this is so clever! :D
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fuckyouseandonahue Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011
not bad at all, never is. you managed to make rhyming not sound cheesy. i just had a funny image of you raping...sean don, $money. you kinda do resemble eminem...hmmmm
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the-upward-glance Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011
Nah, I don't think it's weak. If anything it's kinda cute x) I liked it, it was clever and interesting. I loved the last lil couplet especially. I think that a lot, haha. I sounds like a song or something...I dunno. I think if you expounded on some of these thoughts you could make a cool piece.
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